Fiction, Jack

Jack and The Fountain of Youth — Audio Installment 53

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Jack Cover with border small canvas

by HL Carpenter
ISBN: 978-0-9884095-1-4
Ebook ISBN: 978-0-9884095-0-7
Copyright (c) 2012 by Top Drawer Ink Corp.


Continued from Audio Installment 52
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Jack and The Fountain of Youth — Audio Installment 53


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Below is the text version of the audio.
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Then Jack whooped.

Nessa stood, brushing sand from her jeans as Jack danced across the clearing. He lurched like a horse with a missing shoe every time his bare foot landed.

Tenspot raised his eyebrows at Nessa and tipped his head toward Jack.

Nessa lifted her hands, palms up.

Tenspot made a circle in the air around one ear and rolled his eyes.

“I saw that!” Jack yelled. “I am not crazy. I am happy!”

Jack stopped in front of Nessa. He leaned close.

She tilted forward, her eyes half closing.

“Yuck! No smoochin’!” Tenspot said.

Nessa jerked back, her face heating.

With his mouth only inches from hers, Jack asked, “Do you know what this means?”



We’re new to the Audacity, the sound program we use for our audio recordings, and to sound effects in general. These are our thoughts on the current episode.

Recording. We recorded this segment in one take, after three practice runs with the microphone off.

Technical. This week, we  learned about different audio narrative styles, and realized anew that narration is an art as well as a science. While we can fix most issues with Audacity (a fabulous program), the heart of the book has to start with the narration.

Comments. We’re getting back into Jack’s voice this week, and want to avoid overplaying his accent and style. Tenspot’s voice and inflection comes more naturally to us. That kid is a great character.

Story changes. We added clarification to the written version this week, in the nonverbal sequence where Tenspot is signalling to Nessa that he believes Jack is crazy.


***** ABOUT THE AUTHOR *****

HL Carpenter is the pen name of a Florida-based mother/daughter duo who writes from their studios in Carpenter Country, a magical place that, like their stories, is unreal but not untrue. When they’re not writing, the Carpenters enjoy exploring the Land of What-If and practicing the fine art of Curiosity.

Also by HL Carpenter:

The SkyHorse. Fourteen year old Tovi thinks finding a flying horse is fabulous luck–until a mysterious stranger says finders aren’t always keepers.

Dream Stealer. Is stealing a dream better than losing your own?

Pirate Summer. When her brother disappears, Josey is sure she knows where he’s gone. And the only way to bring him home is to travel two hundred years into the past with a boy she can’t trust.


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