Jack and The Fountain of Youth — Audio Installment 47

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JACK AND THE FOUNTAIN OF YOUTH
by HL Carpenter
ISBN: 978-0-9884095-1-4
Ebook ISBN: 978-0-9884095-0-7
Copyright (c) 2012 by Top Drawer Ink Corp.

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Jack and The Fountain of Youth — Audio Installment 47

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Read along with us!
Below is the text version of the audio.

(Show notes are beneath the text.)

Nessa pulled the hem of her shirt free from a bramble and sprinted after him. “Are you hurt, Jack?”

He grimaced. “I twisted my ankle when I fell and I might have cut my leg. Something wet is running down inside my boot.”

Fear cramped her stomach. She grabbed his hand. His fingers closed around hers and the warmth flickered, steadying her. He’d be all right. She’d make sure he was all right.

“We’ll get you out.”

She helped him sit up, but his lower leg remained stuck in a dark gash reamed deep into the earth by the taproot of the fallen pine.

“Can you see inside the hole?” Tenspot asked.

“No,” Jack said.

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SHOW NOTES

We’re new to the Audacity, the sound program we use for our audio recordings, and to sound effects in general. These are our thoughts on the current episode.

Recording. We recorded this segment in two takes, after three practice runs with the microphone off.

Technical. This week, we changed the bass and treble on Nessa’s voice as an experiment. We have been inconsistent with her voice throughout these recordings, and will have to go back to the beginning  once we’ve finished the complete recording to make her consistent.

Comments. Tenspot’s voice came out better this week, though we didn’t change the Audacity effects we’ve been using. Instead we changed our voice by lowering it a bit as we recorded, and so the Audacity change worked better. We have taken screen snaps of the changes we make so we can duplicate them from week to week. This whole project would be better if the entire book was recorded in multiple sessions over a shorter time period. We’ve been recording the audio version of our next release, A Cause for Murder, and keeping the tones and the voice patterns similar is much easier when the work is done over a more condensed time frame.

Story changes. We made two changes to the written version this week. The first was because we continue to grow as writers, and so we like to weed out items we no longer prefer in our older writing. So we changed this sentence:

“There is something wet running down inside my boot.”

to

“Something wet is running down inside my boot.”

to eliminate the “there is” and make the sentence move more easily. We would also have liked to eliminate “something” because we find that “thing” words are imprecise and stating precisely what we mean makes the writing more crisp and the reading moves faster.

 

We  also changed this sentence:

She’d make sure of it.

to

She’d make sure he was all right.

to eliminate “it,” another imprecise word that makes the writing seem weak.

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***** ABOUT THE AUTHOR *****

HL Carpenter is the pen name of a Florida-based mother/daughter duo who writes from their studios in Carpenter Country, a magical place that, like their stories, is unreal but not untrue. When they’re not writing, the Carpenters enjoy exploring the Land of What-If and practicing the fine art of Curiosity.

Also by HL Carpenter:

The SkyHorse. Fourteen year old Tovi thinks finding a flying horse is fabulous luck–until a mysterious stranger says finders aren’t always keepers.

Dream Stealer. Is stealing a dream better than losing your own?

Pirate Summer. When her brother disappears, Josey is sure she knows where he’s gone. And the only way to bring him home is to travel two hundred years into the past with a boy she can’t trust.

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